On Sundays, I share tidbits of my works in progress as part of Weekend Warrior’s 8-Sentence Sunday. And since I'm currently participating in NaNoWriMo, I'll be posting a little weekend wrap-up at the conclusion of today’s snippet.
My NaNoWriMo project is a paranormal (erotic) romance titled DISARMING COWBOYS, book 7 of my Lone Wolves of Shay Falls series. After escaping her werewolf caveman last week, she's ducked into a local fair with no money to ease her hunger.
Invisible claws
gnawed at Jayel’s stomach while she found herself watching a young couple with
two tow-headed little boys. She and her twin brother had been taken to the
carnival once, when they’d been about six. They were too small for most of the
rides, and while Jayson had been quite put out about it, Jayel had been
secretly glad. The giant rides scared her, whirling by so fast, and deep down she
knew she wasn’t ready for such a big adventure.
She still wasn’t.
A teenage girl
drifted past, pausing long enough to dump a cardboard tray of nachos into the
garbage can beside the bench. She’d barely gone away before Jayel leaped up and
peered inside the garbage can, greeted by the pungent odor of overripe food
while weighing her level starvation against the various diseases she’d been
risking by diving through the disgusting blend of abandoned fair food.
“Today has been one
personal low after the other,” she muttered, wrinkling her nose while she
reached in to pluck out a chip sitting on top of the pile.
So what do you think?
End of Week 3 -Heading into Week 4 NaNo wrap up:
Almost there! I expect to hit 50k with the next writing session, I hope. I would have finished already if I hadn't taken a day off to go see Catching Fire (which was awesome, by the way). 50k will not complete the novel--it's between 2/3 and 3/4 complete. So I'll keep on writing until the 30th in hopes the book will be finished by the end of the month.
Almost there! I expect to hit 50k with the next writing session, I hope. I would have finished already if I hadn't taken a day off to go see Catching Fire (which was awesome, by the way). 50k will not complete the novel--it's between 2/3 and 3/4 complete. So I'll keep on writing until the 30th in hopes the book will be finished by the end of the month.
End of Week 3 progress:
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I'm intrigued and feeling sorry for her. How did she end up there? Where is her twin brother? What happened to the rest of her family? Poor Jayel (love the name BTW). Good luck on finishing Nano! (Though you're almost there ;-) )
ReplyDeleteThanks for that feedback--and the NaNo wishes!!
DeleteWow. How painful to have to sink to just levels in order to survive. You captured her pain and struggle so well in just 8 sentences!
ReplyDeleteThank you for that! Yeah, she's doing all sorts of things in this book she never thought she'd sink to.
DeletePoor Jayel. I'm totally on her side right now, thanks to your terrific writing! Excellent excerpt, hope things look up for her soon.
ReplyDeleteOoh, that's great to know, since she was an antagonist in the rest of the series and now must become the (reluctant) heroine!
DeleteI can only imagine how dehumanizing that must be for Jayel. It's amazing what lows poverty and desperation can bring us to, including how we view ourselves. Excellent eight. I'm hoping things improve for her as time goes on!
ReplyDeleteYes indeed! It's been rough going for poor Jayel. Thanks for stopping by. :)
DeleteAw, bless her poor pea picking heart. I hope things start to look up for her.
ReplyDeleteLOL! Pea picking...definitely not a place she wants to be. Thanks for stopping by. :)
DeleteI take it the fair doesn't have an entry fee?
ReplyDeleteNope! Sounds like you're thinking more like a county fair, where this is actually a local festival where activities cost money, but not entry. Thanks for bringing it up!
DeleteThat's a jam packed 8 right there. Lots of questions to keep the reader reading. Well done J!
ReplyDeleteHistory Sleuth's Milk Carton Murders
Thanks so much!! And also for the comment about the fair...you're right on the money. Or the NOT money, LOL.
DeleteAs a side note to Sue's question. Most of the fairs around me don't charge a fee to get in, only a fee to park the car.
ReplyDeleteExcellent writing, J Rose. So visual and so fluid. Sometimes one loses the other, but not in your case! I'm intrigued by your character and the situation she's in, how did she get there?
ReplyDeleteNumerous fairs, and even carnivals around here have begun to charge an entrance fee, but there are still many that don't. :-)
Good 8!