It's Snippet Sunday, a Weekend Writing Warriors' blog hop!
Despite a busy week, I made hopping progress on Archipellus: God of Samhain. It's almost done!
A quick synopsis:
Despite a busy week, I made hopping progress on Archipellus: God of Samhain. It's almost done!
A quick synopsis:
How can he hope to embrace love when his very touch brings death?
Archipellus thinks he alone is immune to the romantic power that has overtaken his sabbat brothers, for an incubus who drains partners during sex could never find happiness with a mortal woman. Then he meets Melissa, a woman willing to brave the danger of his erotic touch in hopes that his power might also cure her sister. When their passion tears a hole in the veil between worlds, Archipellus will embark on a quest to seal the breach and rescue the sister who was snatched and taken across the rift.
Onto the snippet...
Last time, Archipellus, the god of Samhain, began the invocation for the ritual to seal the veil between worlds. We ended with: “He gripped the hilt of the sword with both hands and raised it in front of him, his glowing red eyes reflecting off the mirror-like blade. He lifted his head and called the invocation.”
Let's pick up a couple sentences later, after he has spoken the declaration. Now he seeks a female sabbat partner...
Onto the snippet...
Last time, Archipellus, the god of Samhain, began the invocation for the ritual to seal the veil between worlds. We ended with: “He gripped the hilt of the sword with both hands and raised it in front of him, his glowing red eyes reflecting off the mirror-like blade. He lifted his head and called the invocation.”
Let's pick up a couple sentences later, after he has spoken the declaration. Now he seeks a female sabbat partner...
As Archipellus finished the declaration of his intent to seal the veil, his wings unfurled, stretching out to where the tips touched the walls across the chamber. The god of Samhain had wings of strong, yet supple leather, appendages that would anchor him to the veil, holding it together while he infused it with the energy needed to seal the rift. His wings did not have feathers like his brother Jorandil’s, but then, Jorandil bore the blood of an angel. Archipellus was a demon.
The blade still in front of his face, he closed his eyes and let the desperate voices in. There were so many that a lesser being would be driven mad, but Archipellus called upon the sword and his own strength, using meditative techniques to hone his focus. He zeroed in on the female cries, mentally pushing aside those in distress for causes he could not alter while seeking the ones who approached their time of crossing.
Her whisper was what attracted him, resigned, prepared, too young to be taken from life, yet accepting that her time on earth was at an end. That whisper was a siren song, calling out for release by the god of death.
He would answer.
The blade still in front of his face, he closed his eyes and let the desperate voices in. There were so many that a lesser being would be driven mad, but Archipellus called upon the sword and his own strength, using meditative techniques to hone his focus. He zeroed in on the female cries, mentally pushing aside those in distress for causes he could not alter while seeking the ones who approached their time of crossing.
Her whisper was what attracted him, resigned, prepared, too young to be taken from life, yet accepting that her time on earth was at an end. That whisper was a siren song, calling out for release by the god of death.
He would answer.
...What do you think?
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What a strong and wonderful snippet, Rose. A whisper. Pulled me right in.
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DeleteWow, that was COOL. I loved it, especially how he filtered the many voices he was hearing, to hone in on hers. Terrific excerpt.
ReplyDeleteThanks for making my day! :)
DeleteI love his reactions to her cries for help. I do hope he locates her soon! Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteThank you for that feedback!
DeleteGreat snippet! I think all his immunity to the romantic powers just disappeared. Well done! :)
ReplyDeleteHeh heh thanks!
DeleteWonderful snippet! The last line was great!
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DeleteRose, this is so powerful and frightening.
ReplyDeleteThank you! Hopefully he's not TOO scary a hero. :)
DeleteI love that last line. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteI love the whisper that is a siren song. Great descriptions.
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DeleteThis gave me chills. Love it!
ReplyDeleteChills for the reader: Achievement Unlocked. Thank you!
DeleteGreat snippet! Loved everything about it!
ReplyDeleteThank you for that!
DeleteOh, wow. Way to go from a sinking suspicion to full blown creepy confirmation!
ReplyDeleteHis is an interesting job...
DeleteGreat snippet ... interesting last line.
ReplyDeleteGreat! I felt a shiver at the end.
ReplyDeleteCreepy it is. Esp. that last line. Good job.
ReplyDeleteReally loved the last couple lines.
ReplyDeleteVery descriptive and strong snippet. Loved the explanation about the wings and feathers.
ReplyDeletePowerful and awesome! Absolutely love those last lines about the whispering woman! Great descriptions and explanations. I am loving the God of Samhain most of all.
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